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[jason]

Airique ... you just confused the hell out of me.

[Airique]

Yeah yeah, run devil, run!

[Peter Bauer]

Jason, Rix,

Great ideas about the E-primer! Jason, I didn't realize you were into e-prime?

How hard would it be to code that into the spell-check?

[Peter Bauer]

back to the box...

If we stand alone together, I will never have all you need, yeah
Hail, hail the lucky ones
I refer to those in love, yeah

Oh, how I’d love ya till the day I die... and beyond
Do we travel to the same places?
If so can I come?
It feels like egg rollin’ , thick and heavy
All, the past we carry
Oh, I could be new
You under-estimate me

I sometimes realize...i could only live as good as you’ll let me
Do you woman enough to live as my man?
Bandaged hand in hand.

E-prime this:

There is more than enough evidence to indicate that a highly evolved reptilian life form is interacting with human beings. Their presence has been witnessed in every corner of the Earth by people from all walks of life. Now that we have established the fact that they are here, the next question to address is: Where are they coming from?

Theories as to the origin of reptilian “alien” life forms range appear to be threefold. From the accumulative evidence provided to thus far, it has been determined that they are either:

a) Extra-Terrestrial. (ET’s) Beings from another planet or star system,

b) Inner Terrestrial (IT’s) Beings that are naturally evolved terrestrial (Earth) life forms that reside in inner earth Caverns, sub-cities, and underwater bases.

c) Inner-Dimensional. (ID’s) meaning other alien entities existing in vibrational levels (time/space travelers etc.)

Although a large amount of data supporting each theory exists, this report will only address the basic facts regarding each. It is important to realize that, even though each theorized origin appears to be distinct in it’s own right, all three theories could be, and are probably, correct.

[jason]

More than enough evidence exists to indicate that a highly evolved reptilian life form interacts with human beings. People from all walks of life have witnessed their prescence in every corner of the Earth. Now that we know they live among us, the next question arises: Where do they come from?

Theories as to the origin of reptilian “alien” life forms range between three possibilities. From the accumulative evidence provided to thus far, we can describe them either as:

a) Extra-Terrestrial. (ET’s) Beings from another planet or star system,

b) Inner Terrestrial (IT’s) Beings that naturally evolved on earth and reside in inner earth Caverns, sub-cities, and underwater bases.

c) Inner-Dimensional. (ID’s) meaning other alien entities existing in vibrational levels (time/space travelers etc.)

Although a large amount of data supporting each theory exists, this report will only address the basic facts regarding each. Importantly, even though each theorized origin appears distinct in it’s own right, all three theories could have, and probably do have, some truth to them.

lol t3h cr4zy

Jason, I didn't realize you were into e-prime?

Yup.  Still too hard for me to use in, say, the regular posts on Anthropik, but I do use it for my more serious work; printed stuff, books, etc.

How hard would it be to code that into the spell-check?

Well, that IS the question.

[jhereg]

Hmm, well, here's my best shot...

Had to really change things up in a couple places tho'....

Sufficient evidence exists indicating that a highly evolved reptilian life form interacts with human beings. In every corner of the Earth, people from all walks of life have witnessed their presence. Having established that they interact with us, Where do they come from?

Theories as to the origin of reptilian “alien” life forms range appear threefold. From the accumulative evidence provided to us thus far, it appears that the origin shares one or more, and probably all three, of the following elements:

a) Extra-Terrestrial. (ET’s) Beings from another planet or star system,

b) Inner Terrestrial (IT’s) Naturally evolved terrestrial (Earth) life forms that reside in inner earth Caverns, sub-cities, and underwater bases.

c) Inner-Dimensional. (ID’s) meaning other alien entities existing in vibrational levels (time/space travelers etc.)

Although a large amount of data supporting each theory exists, this report only addresses the basic facts regarding each.

And my submission....

Claire: What's your name?
Bender: What's yours?
Claire: Claire.
Bender: Ka-Laire?
Claire: Claire...it's a family name!
Bender: Nooo...It's a fat girl's name!
Claire: Well thank you.
Bender: You're welcome.
Claire: I'm not fat!
Bender: Well not at present but I could see you really pushing maximum density! You see, I'm not sure if you know this...but there are two kinds of fat people. There's fat people that were born to be fat, and then there's fat people that were once thin but they became fat...so when you look at them you can sorta see that thin person inside! You see, you're gonna get married, you're gonna squeeze out a few puppies and then, uh...
[He mimes becoming fat, making noises. Claire gives him the finger.]
Bender: Oh...obscene finger gestures from such a pristine girl!
Claire: I'm not that pristine!
Bender: Are you a virgin? I'll bet you a million dollars that you are! Let's end the suspense! Is it gonna be...a white wedding?
Claire: Why don't you just shut up?
Bender: Have you ever kissed a boy on the mouth?...Have you ever been felt up? Over the bra, under the blouse, shoes off...hoping to God your parents don't walk in?
Claire: Do you want me to puke?
Bender: Over the panties, no bra, blouse unbuttoned, Calvin's in a ball on the front seat past eleven on a school night?

dagnabit, jason beat me to it.... 

[WildeRix]

Wow, this one challenged me and led me through lots of fun.  It kind of felt like translating poetry--wanting to make the change in one line of dialogue work with the change I needed to make in the next line so that I could make the e-prime have the same quality of impact that the b-english had.  Thanks for the fun jhereg.

by the way...

dagnabit, jason beat me to it.... 

... but he didn't provide a new challenge.  so he only gets partial credit. 

Now, on to the fun:

Claire: What do they call you?
Bender: What do they call you?
Claire: Claire.
Bender: Ka-Laire?
Claire: Claire...it belongs to someone in my family!
Bender: Nooo...it belongs to a fat girl!
Claire: Well thank you.
Bender: Think nothing of it.
Claire: I don't look fat!
Bender: Well not at present but I could see you really pushing maximum density! You see, I don't know if you know this...but you can find two kinds of fat people. Some fat people came into this world simply to get fat, and then some fat people came into this world looking thin but they grew  fat...so when you look at them you can sorta see that thin person inside! You see, you'll get married, you'll squeeze out a few puppies and then, uh...
[He mimes becoming fat, making noises. Claire gives him the finger.]
Bender: Oh...obscene finger gestures from such a pristine girl!
Claire: Don't call me pristine!
Bender: Have you lost your virginity? I'll bet you a million dollars that you haven't! Let's end the suspense! Will you have...a white wedding?
Claire: Why don't you just shut up?
Bender: Have you ever kissed a boy on the mouth?...Has a boy ever felt you up? Over the bra, under the blouse, shoes off...hoping to God your parents don't walk in?
Claire: Do you want me to puke?
Bender: Over the panties, no bra, blouse unbuttoned, Calvin sits in a ball on the front seat past eleven on a school night?

And now for your new challenge...

And when he came to the place where the wild things are
they roared their terrible roars and gnashed their terrible teeth
and rolled their terrible eyes and showed their terrible claws
till Max said "BE STILL!" and tamed them with the magic trick
of staring into all their yellow eyes without blinking once
and they were frightened and called him the most wild thing of all
and made him king of all wild things.
"And now," cried Max, "let the wild rumpus start!"
[the wild rumpus ensues over several pages]
"Now stop!" Max said and sent the wild things of to bed
without their supper.  And Max the king of all wild things was lonely
and wanted to be where someone loved him best of all.
Then all around from far away across the world
he smelled good things to eat
so he gave up being king of where the wild things are.
And Max ... stepped into his private boat and ... sailed ...
into the night of his very own room
where he found his supper waiting for him
and it was still hot.

[jason]

... but he didn't provide a new challenge.  so he only gets partial credit.

Ohhh ... I should pay attention to the rules of forum thread games.

[WildeRix]

... but he didn't provide a new challenge.  so he only gets partial credit.

Ohhh ... I should pay attention to the rules of forum thread games.

The funninness stands out all the more because of how deliberately Scout laid out the rules. 

[Peter Bauer]

Seriously, keep the fucking ball rolling folks. If you have something to add, please at least take up the challenge first! 

And when he came to the place where the wild things live
they roared their terrible roars and gnashed their terrible teeth
and rolled their terrible eyes and showed their terrible claws
till Max said "SIT STILL!" and tamed them with the magic trick
of staring into all their yellow eyes without blinking once
and they felt frightened and called him the most wild thing of all
and made him king of all wild things.
"And now," cried Max, "let the wild rumpus start!"
[the wild rumpus ensues over several pages]
"Now stop!" Max said and sent the wild things of to bed
without their supper.  And Max the king of all wild things felt lonely
and wanted to live where someone loved him best of all.
Then all around from far away across the world
he smelled good things to eat
so he gave up his life as king of where the wild things live.
And Max ... stepped into his private boat and ... sailed ...
into the night of his very own room
where he found his supper waiting for him
and it still felt hot to the touch.

Oooooooh Snap!

Okay, my challenge:

Don't Worry, Be Happy Lyrics


Don't Worry, Be Happy
From the Movie "Cocktails"
Performed by Bobby McFerrin

Here is a little song I wrote
You might want to sing it note for note
Don't worry be happy
In every life we have some trouble
When you worry you make it double
Don't worry, be happy......

Ain't got no place to lay your head
Somebody came and took your bed
Don't worry, be happy
The land lord say your rent is late
He may have to litigate
Don't worry, be happy
Lood at me I am happy
Don't worry, be happy
Here I give you my phone number
When you worry call me
I make you happy
Don't worry, be happy
Ain't got no cash, ain't got no style
Ain't got not girl to make you smile
But don't worry be happy
Cause when you worry
Your face will frown
And that will bring everybody down
So don't worry, be happy (now).....

There is this little song I wrote
I hope you learn it note for note
Like good little children
Don't worry, be happy
Listen to what I say
In your life expect some trouble
But when you worry
You make it double
Don't worry, be happy......
Don't worry don't do it, be happy
Put a smile on your face
Don't bring everybody down like this
Don't worry, it will soon past
Whatever it is
Don't worry, be happy

[WildeRix]

Seriously, keep the fucking ball rolling folks. If you have something to add, please at least take up the challenge first! 

Well, the thread does bear the word "sandbox" in its title which implies a lot of playing around.  Maybe the sandbox and the challenge should sit in different threads?

[Peter Bauer]

Maybe you should sit in a different thread. Oooooooh snap! 

[WildeRix]

Maybe you should sit in a different thread. Oooooooh snap! 

Oh, yeah?  Well... go thread yourself.   

[starfish]

Don't Worry, Feel Happy Lyrics


Don't Worry, Feel Happy
From the Movie "Cocktails"
Performed by Bobby McFerrin

Enjoy this little song I wrote
You might want to sing it note for note
Don't worry feel happy
In every life we have some trouble
When you worry you make it double
Don't worry, feel happy......

Have got no place to lay your head
Somebody came and took your bed
Don't worry, feel happy
The land lord say you haven't paid
He may have to litigate
Don't worry, feel happy
Look at me I feel happy
Don't worry, feel happy
Here I give you my phone number
When you worry call me
I make you happy
Don't worry, feel happy
Have got no cash, have got no style
Have got not girl to make you smile
But don't worry feel happy
Cause when you worry
Your face will frown
And that will bring everybody down
So don't worry, feel happy (now).....

Did you like this little song I wrote?
I hope you learn it note for note
Like good little children
Don't worry, feel happy
Listen to what I say
In your life expect some trouble
But when you worry
You make it double
Don't worry, feel happy......
Don't worry don't do it, feel happy
Put a smile on your face
Don't bring everybody down like this
Don't worry, it will soon past
Whatever happens
Don't worry, feel happy

Did I miss any?  Can you say "ain't' in e-prime?  I felt unsure, so I changed it anyway. 

For a long time they looked at the river beneath them, saying nothing, and the river said nothing too, for it felt very quiet and peaceful on this summer afternoon.

"Tigger is all right really," said Piglet lazily.

"Of course he is," said Christopher Robin.

"Everybody is really," said Pooh.  "That's what I think," said Pooh.  "but I don't suppose I'm right," he said.

"Of course you are," said Christopher Robin.

[Peter Bauer]

For a long time they looked at the river beneath them, saying nothing, and the river said nothing too, for it felt very quiet and peaceful on this summer afternoon.

"Tigger feels all right really," said Piglet lazily.

"Of course he does," said Christopher Robin.

"Everybody feels all right," said Pooh.  "I think so at least," said Pooh.  "but I don't suppose I know everything." he said.

"Maybe you do." said Christopher Robin.

Gosh! Dialog stretches my e-prime boundaries much more than expository or poetic writing.

Let's see what someone else does:

PADME: Anakin, this baby will change our lives. I doubt the Queen will continue to allow me to serve in the Senate, and if the Council discovers you are the father, you will be expelled from the Jedi Order.

ANAKIN: I know ….

PADME: Anakin, do you think Obi-Wan might be able to help us?

ANAKIN: (suspicious) Have you told him anything?

PADME: No, but he's your mentor, your best friend . . . he must suspect something.

ANAKIN: He's been a father to me, but he's still on the Council. Don't tell him anything!

PADME: I won't, Anakin.

ANAKIN: I don't need his help . . . Our baby is a blessing, not a problem.